Argh, pirates! (#FiveSentenceFiction)

Thanks for joining me on another Five Sentence Fiction journey. Such a fun and challenging exercise! Five Sentence Fiction is hosted by the lovely Lillie McFerrin. And here’s a little recap for this week:

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

This week: PIRATES

And now my entry!

As loud as it was, the clink of the cannisters behind her might as well have been claps of thunder, audible above even the purr of the engine. But there was no need for quiet or secrecy now–she’d already declared her black banner, rifle in hand while honest workers had been forced to fill her dishonest wagon. She couldn’t continue this way forever, though. As her name spread across the seas of sand, slipping into the crevices of every shipwrecked town, she was sure the townspeople would rise from the ruins  like the ghosts of offended spirits to shuck their hurt and don their weapons.

No, she needed to get far away from the barebones townships; they had little steal, but so much to be enraged by and eventually, that tide would turn on her and drown her in the belly of the desert.

Make sure to check out all the other booty from the Five Sentence folks here.

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16 thoughts on “Argh, pirates! (#FiveSentenceFiction)

  1. I’m about half way through this week’s posts (the ones up at least) and this is my favorite so far, by far! Great pacing, characterization (the way she thinks of the honest people and her dishonest wagon, then casts ahead to the future) — and the little details like “shipwrecked town,” and use of the word “tide” to contrast with the desert image at the end. All so good!

  2. Very poetic descriptions. Every word counts. Great style and craft. Phrases like “honest workers filled her dishonest wagon” and “sure the townspeople would rise from the ruins like the ghosts of offended spirits to shuck their hurt and don their weapons” are pure treasure!

  3. Wow! So much in just five sentences.
    I can but agree with others who talk about your wonderful use of phrases that conjure up many images. My favourite was, “As her name spread across the seas of sand, slipping into the crevices of every shipwrecked town…” Portrays a feeling that her spreading infamy would be her eventual downfall.
    Thanks for a great read.

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