Rickety Planning

It’s Sunday, and you guessed it, that means another Six Sentence Sunday, which means:

  • You pick six (6) sentences from anything you’ve written–a work in progress (wip), something under submission, something sold; something new, something old.
  • You sign up at the Six Sunday website Tuesday starting at 6PM EST.
  • You post it on Sunday (along with posting a link of suxisunday.com)! Such as I have below.
  • And then you enjoy.

And I’m sharing snippets from a wip called Countdown, in which a young woman is doing everything she can to save her floating city from being “decommissioned,” or dropped from the sky.

Last week Lawson decided not to go into his mother’s house guns a’blazing. He wouldn’t be much of a match for the soldiers. So, now he’s trying to figure out how to get into the house.

So instead of barging in one gun a’blazing, he slid around the house to the back porch. It wasn’t quite dusk yet, but the shadows were growing deep and spindly, climbing and closing around the house. No lights were on inside, and if whoever was in the house was talking, he couldn’t it over the incessant hum of the generator. He hoped the buzzing would cover the squeaks of the wooden boards of the porch. Or he hopes he’d at least remember where each protesting board was. But he found that today, suddenly, the boards were slightly different, just enough wrong to make him unsure.

But could squeaking boards really blow his whole rescue mission? We’ll see next week. For now: so many snippets, so little time.

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28 thoughts on “Rickety Planning

  1. J.M….J.M.! So much to love here!

    …the shadows were growing deep and spindly, climbing and closing around the house.

    Love this description. It’s positively visceral. And then the hesitancy on Lawson’s part–the boards being “different”. Terrific stuff, but I’m not surprised. I really enjoy your snippets.

    1. You know, I never thought of it like that. I was just thinking that he’s nervous enough that perhaps he shouldn’t be as sure as he normally is about the location of squeaky boards.

  2. Carrie Crain says:

    Nice use of the boards to sprinkle tension in the story. I have squeaky boards and they drive me absolutely bonkers when I’m trying to sneak up on my hubby!

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