Grasping for Straws (#SFFSAT)

So, Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday: a mouthful, a blog hop, a hive mind of the most geek-tastic brains out there. Some guidelines, a little welcome:

Welcome to Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. On the surface, it’s a web ring of authors who post snippets of their work for comment. In reality, it’s a close-knit group of friends and colleagues working together to support and encourage one another and promote the science fiction and fantasy genres.

– JC Cassels, 2012


  1. Absolutely no erotica or explicit content. This ring is for all ages to read. This is the founding reason for this ring, and any diversions will be removed from the final list on Saturday.
  2. Length of snippets:
    • Prose: 4 – 10 sentences.
    • Poetry: 4 – 10 lines.
  3. Any and all comments on the authors’ work are welcome, but please take care to keep them constructive.

I’ve been sharing snippets from a wip called Human: a tale about a detective who meets an android named Adelyn X. And can’t get her out of his head, which leads to trouble, of course.

Last week Adelyn finally got up onto the operating table for her repairs. Meanwhile, Jack’s trying to scratch together some sort of pattern to explain how and why Adelyn’s world has been filled with dead bodies. He’s thinking there’s some sort of conspiracy. He just doesn’t know what kind.

Jack circled the room, keeping his face bored as he watched Zed’s mechanical arms click in anticipation. As Zed became engrossed in Adelyn’s open skin, Jack checked his name in the police databases, using his own special glasses. Surprisingly, the cyborg popped up fairly easy. His real name as Steven Zinko; he’d been picked up for theft, armed robbery and a slew of petty crimes he’d never been kept in containment for.  Jack also checked Zed against the web of growing connections in the list of people Adelyn has supplied him with. He didn’t fit into any thread. Jack’s theory was falling apart.

He walked in circles of feigned boredom, actually searching for some scrap of information to tie “Zed” into everything else. He wasn’t finding anything and the idea of missing something to bring the case together made him want to trash Zed’s messy worktable; but as he moved to turn away, he noticed a scrawled note on a yellowed pad. “Ax repairs, 6/12, pass to Jr.”

Not quite the smoking gun he’s looking for, but of course, he’ll take any thread if it’ll lead to unraveling what’s going on. More next week, but for now: great reading material to make your Saturday a little speculative.


Past SFFSAT snippets: Human Snippet IHuman Snippet IIHuman Snippet IIIHuman Snipet IVHuman Snippet VHuman Snippet VIHuman Snippet VIIHuman Snippet VIIIHuman Snippet IXHuman Snippet XHuman XIHuman XIIHuman XIIIHuman XIVHuman XVHuman XVIHuman XVIIHuman XVIIIHuman XIXHuman XXHuman XXI, Human XXII.


21 thoughts on “Grasping for Straws (#SFFSAT)

    1. You know, I wasn’t really sure if it did well as a mystery (as I don’t read many and had no idea if I was setting up clues/discoveries well), but I trust your opinion. Thanks, Sarah!

  1. Picked up for armed robbery and yet not incarcerated? Zed must have a very capable lawyer! Great snippet – seeing Jack getting more frustrated by the minute is fun, and I liked the final release of the moment he at last finds a clue.

    1. I blame it more on the rampant crime. In my heart of hearts, it’s like a high-tech Gotham without a Batman to save it. And Jack is no Batman. I’m glad you’re enjoying seeing Jack tortured. It’s fun to string him along.

  2. I like the tension that Zed is operating on Adelyn and Jack is trying to find some dirt on him at the same time. What if he discovers something on Zed during a delicate part of Adelyn’s procedure. Maybe he just did. Great snippet.

  3. Yep, I can feel Jack’s frustration, and the need to trash the place. Been there, nearly done that. Hee hee…I like that there’s a mystery to solve. Ohh!! Exciting.

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