The Next Customer (#SFFSAT)

So, Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday: a mouthful, a blog hop, a hive mind of the most geek-tastic brains out there. Some guidelines, a little welcome:

Welcome to Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. On the surface, it’s a web ring of authors who post snippets of their work for comment. In reality, it’s a close-knit group of friends and colleagues working together to support and encourage one another and promote the science fiction and fantasy genres.

– JC Cassels, 2012


  1. Absolutely no erotica or explicit content. This ring is for all ages to read. This is the founding reason for this ring, and any diversions will be removed from the final list on Saturday.
  2. Length of snippets:
    • Prose: 4 – 10 sentences.
    • Poetry: 4 – 10 lines.
  3. Any and all comments on the authors’ work are welcome, but please take care to keep them constructive.

I’ve been sharing snippets from a wip called Human: a tale about a detective who meets an android named Adelyn X. And can’t get her out of his head, which leads to trouble, of course.

Last week Jack and Adelyn tracked down a lead in a gritty part of town. They’ve been invited into Dr. Geoffrey Hart’s apartment. The disheveled man is  Dr. Hart.

His clothes were disheveled, his eyes red.

Jack started to ask him what he was doing in such a dump, but before he could pose the question a woman with little more than lipstick on sauntered out of the only hallway in the apartment. She had a mess of blonde curls encircling her face, and a system of glittering, golden strings covering her breasts and other purely animal places on her body.

“Geoff, is this the next customer? ‘Cause if the girl wants in, it’s extra.” The woman turned to Adelyn, looking her up and down. “You know if you’re a client here, you’re obligated to sign a release that states you’re consenting to being recorded and viewed by Geoff here?”

“Jaime, please,” Geoffrey exclaimed. “Go back to the room. And stay there until I come get you.”

What exactly have Adelyn and Jack stumbled upon? Or rather, who? More next week, but there are more snippets to go, and they’re neat-o.



13 thoughts on “The Next Customer (#SFFSAT)

  1. What kind of doctor is he?! Holy crap. Dr. Moreau meets Bladerunner meets Rocky Horror. An unexpected turn for the couple. Looking forward to see some conversation between them and the doctor.

  2. Great description – the woman’s garb (or lack) matched by her sardonic comment on Adelyn’s presence gives a really sleazy feel to the whole situation. Good snippet – I’m enjoying this sequence greatly.

  3. Hey, let’s not start knocking lipstick as an outfit. It’s versatile, works in all seasons, definitely cheaper than those ‘designer’ ensembles, and something you can throw on in a pinch. I sense a new trend.

  4. Things get stranger and stranger!

    As always, love your snippet — beautiful description, great dialogue, and it compels one to read further. (I can see myself staying up late at night to finish reading this story when it’s out.)

  5. OK, I’m reading these in reverse gear (totally in character for me) and my first reaction is “Whatever this establishment is, it’s on the far side of Skeevy Township, maybe all the way into Squicky County.”

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