Smoldering (#SFFSAT)

So, Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday: a mouthful, a blog hop, a hive mind of the most geek-tastic brains out there. Some guidelines, a little welcome:

Welcome to Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. On the surface, it’s a web ring of authors who post snippets of their work for comment. In reality, it’s a close-knit group of friends and colleagues working together to support and encourage one another and promote the science fiction and fantasy genres.

– JC Cassels, 2012


  1. Absolutely no erotica or explicit content. This ring is for all ages to read. This is the founding reason for this ring, and any diversions will be removed from the final list on Saturday.
  2. Length of snippets:
    • Prose: 4 – 10 sentences.
    • Poetry: 4 – 10 lines.
  3. Any and all comments on the authors’ work are welcome, but please take care to keep them constructive.

I’ve been sharing snippets from a wip called Human: a tale about a detective who meets an android named Adelyn X. And can’t get her out of his head, which leads to trouble, of course.

I have also started sharing Young Gods, a YA wip about its namesake.


Today I’m sharing more of Human. Last time we met waaaay back in the day, Jack was surprised after a shower by a dripping wet Adelyn in his house uninvited. Adelyn then explained that she needed to talk to him. This is after Adelyn has changed into dry clothes that Jack has provided.

Note: I neglected the cue word CASCADE, and was removed from the linky list. :( Maybe next time I’ll follow directions.


He had the kitchenbot make tea and found a bottle of rum in a cabinet; it wasn’t the whiskey she’d asked for, but it would do. He’d made a cup for both of them and had drunk a fourth of his by the time Adelyn padded out of his bathroom, looking disheveled with a messy cascade of hair falling along the right side of her neck, though her face was its normal, composed mask. She took the mug he’d set aside for her and slid onto a stool at the counter. She sipped it and looked up at him with glowing eyes.

“Why do your eyes do that?”

“Do what?”


“Oh,” she said, looking down into the cup as if to hide them. It was impossible; the smoldering light reflected back from the dark liquid in her hands. “It is a…malfunction that I have neglected to have fixed. It does not occur often, and so, I forget it happens.”



Totally reasonable, right? Thanks for coming by and make sure to check out the other  snippets.



4 thoughts on “Smoldering (#SFFSAT)

    1. Thanks for coming by, Peter. I love the way you read this ms! I think you’re in the right direction with Adelyn. She’s too smart to truly forget, so why leave it? We shall see. Have a great weekend and Happy New Year!

  1. Wow….what a smooth scene. This has been one of my favorite exchanges between Jack and Adelyn. “Why do your eyes do that?” “What?” – that’s great stuff, not crinkle in the corners, or maybe two different colors, but they glow – probably something she should expect to be asked about. And then she tries to “hide” them by looking into the rum filled cup of tea in her hands, that he’s already had four of? Awesome!

    1. Thanks for coming by, S. A. :) And I’m going to also say wow because I’m surprised at how much you liked it. Pleasantly surprised! Thank you. Only…he hasn’t had four, just a fourth of his cup. Maybe half would be more impactful, though? Anyway, again, thank you!

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